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09-06-2008, 01:25 PM
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Hey fellows, I am sharing another one of my poems
"Bicher ker hum se kabhi wo bhi terpa to hoga
Chund lamhey hi sahi, wo bhi roya to hoga
Beenai chashm ki kho gai hai ter reh ker
Us ke nainon ko bhi ashkon ne bhigoya to hoga
Dil ke rishtey bhi kis kader ajeeb hotey hain
Tujh ko bhi sanam kisi rishtey ne thukraya to hoga
Lub khamosh honge, kismat main tanhai hogi
Tub hi wo merey piyaar main dooba to hoga
Terey naseeb main hai aakhiri saans jub tuk
Jahan bhi jaoge wahan piyaar ka saya to hoga"
Allah hafiz |
09-06-2008, 01:28 PM
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Tujh ko bhi sanam kisi rishtey ne thukraya to hoga
AWWW BRO BAHUAT HI PYARI HAI................
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09-06-2008, 01:32 PM
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11-06-2008, 03:43 PM
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Rep Power: 4 | | Nadeeem Bhai ... Its very beautifulll .....
esp the last shaer ...
Terey naseeb main hai aakhiri saans jub tuk
Jahan bhi jaoge wahan piyaar ka saya to hoga"
Buhut Achi ... 
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11-06-2008, 06:05 PM
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11-06-2008, 06:14 PM
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u have a very good hold on words :D
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12-06-2008, 06:55 AM
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Originally Posted by Lady Mystique  Nadeeem Bhai ... Its very beautifulll .....
esp the last shaer ...
Terey naseeb main hai aakhiri saans jub tuk
Jahan bhi jaoge wahan piyaar ka saya to hoga"
Buhut Achi ... | awww, i am so happy that you like it beta:)
thank you for your appreciation:)
aik shair ke liyeh hosla afzai ke alfaaz hi us ka sub se bara khazeena hotey hain:).......itni daulat deney ka behud shukeriah:)
jeeti raho:) |
12-06-2008, 06:56 AM
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Originally Posted by ~pari~ awww its nice nadeem bhai | dera dera merabani khorey:)
ta likhegi?:)
jeeti raho:) |
12-06-2008, 06:57 AM
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Originally Posted by freeek very nice nadeem paraaaaawa
u have a very good hold on words :D | bari bari merbani behnrey
main sadkey meri behna alfaaz per kadir hona merey bus ki baat nahin:) ALLAH TALLAh ka karam hai ke bus wo alfaaz sujha deta hai:)......main to kuch bhi nahin:)
aur hairangi ki baat hai meri tamaam moderator sisters shaeri ki samajh se mashallah mala maal hain:) it is so good to see this:)
jeeti raho:) |
12-06-2008, 07:26 AM
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Originally Posted by Emblem99 Hey fellows, I am sharing another one of my poems
"Bicher ker hum se kabhi wo bhi terpa to hoga
Chund lamhey hi sahi, wo bhi roya to hoga
Beenai chashm ki kho gai hai ter reh ker
Us ke nainon ko bhi ashkon ne bhigoya to hoga
Dil ke rishtey bhi kis kader ajeeb hotey hain
Tujh ko bhi sanam kisi rishtey ne thukraya to hoga
Lub khamosh honge, kismat main tanhai hogi
Tub hi wo merey piyaar main dooba to hoga
Terey naseeb main hai aakhiri saans jub tuk
Jahan bhi jaoge wahan piyaar ka saya to hoga"
Allah hafiz |
aray wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh 
kya bat hay nadeem sahab ap ki..... bohot khoooooooooob poetry ki ap ne.. parh kar maza agaya..
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12-06-2008, 07:53 AM
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Rep Power: 14 | | | thank you omer aur haan yeh sahab wala andaaz bohat ajnabi hai yaar, bhai kaha karo na:)
aur tumhain maza aya, i am grateful:)
there are other poems too:) |
12-06-2008, 08:22 AM
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bas bahi eik din may eik bar tareef ziada free nahi 
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12-06-2008, 09:27 AM
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12-06-2008, 09:37 AM
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12-06-2008, 11:38 AM
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17-06-2008, 03:00 AM
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Originally Posted by Emblem99 Hey fellows, I am sharing another one of my poems
"Bicher ker hum se kabhi wo bhi terpa to hoga
Chund lamhey hi sahi, wo bhi roya to hoga
Beenai chashm ki kho gai hai ter reh ker
Us ke nainon ko bhi ashkon ne bhigoya to hoga
Dil ke rishtey bhi kis kader ajeeb hotey hain
Tujh ko bhi sanam kisi rishtey ne thukraya to hoga
Lub khamosh honge, kismat main tanhai hogi
Tub hi wo merey piyaar main dooba to hoga
Terey naseeb main hai aakhiri saans jub tuk
Jahan bhi jaoge wahan piyaar ka saya to hoga"
Allah hafiz | Umdahh!!! :) per aap ki eejazat sey (jo ki mujhey pata hey ki aap dey detey agar main maangti ) thodi bohat alfaaz ki terteeb badal doo'n !!!!
Bicher ker hum se kabhi wo bhi TO terpa hoga
Chund lamhey hi sahi, wo bhi TO roya hoga
Beenai chashm ki kho gai ter reh keY her waqt
Us ke nainon ko bhi ashkon ne bhigoya hoga
Dil ke rishtey bhi kis kader ajeeb hotey hain
Tujh ko bhi sanam kisi rishtey ne TO JAKRA hoga
Lub khamosh honge, kismat main JAB tanhai hogi
tab TU USKO BHI MERA PIYAAR YAAD AAYA hoga
Terey naseeb main hai aakhiri saans jub tuk
Jahan bhi jaoge MERAY piyaar ka saya hoga"
well main khud koee aisi achchi nahi hoon shairi main n na hi yahan yey sab kernay ka koee maqsad hey ... bas ghazal padhtey huey jahan jahan flow thoda atka tu wahan main aagey peechay ker diya ...
I hope k Nadeem bhai k fans ko bura nahi laga hoga :)
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17-06-2008, 06:17 AM
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Rep Power: 14 | | ye ghazal main ne 1990 main likhi thi:) aur tub se aaj tuk bus islah kiyeh baghair bus posting hi kerta aya hoon:). but i must say ke tum bilkul theek kehti ho ke waqiye hi flow main nahin thi......and i am so grateful ke tum ne tsheeh kerdi:).
beta baqi bhi hain wo bi dekh lo kiyun ke main ne bohat arsey main kuch naya nahin kaha hai....yeb sub purana hai siwae wo watan ki larazti rooh wali ghazal jo bus main ne jazbat main aa ker likhi thi last month:).
I am proud to be your brother behna:). thank you :) aur ye wala thanx genuine hai .
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18-06-2008, 12:42 AM
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Rep Power: 12 | | | :)) .... aur meray saath yey hota hey ki if I come across with any of my poem which was written in early days (bulkey shayed kisi ki bhi) ... tu everytime I feel like ki ..."nahi yey aisey nahi aisey hona chahiyey" ... n so on matlab Theme tu zahir hey nahi tabdeel kerti but kuch alfaaz ....
pata hey hota kia hey jab hum kuch likh rahey hotey hein tu us waqt aik khaas soch k zer-e-asar hotey hein aur bohat mumkin hota hey ki usmey kuch kami reh jaey ... tu amoman jab hum usko dobara "Padhney" hein tu hamara poora focus Padhney pey hota hein aur hamey pata chal jata hey ki kahan flow break huwa ... kahan kis cheez ki kami reh gaee ...
chahey aap nazam mey kuch likh rahey hoo'n ya nasar mey ... dono maa'mloo'n mey wo Pdhna madadgar saabit hota hey .... aur main hamesha yey kerti hoon .... jab bhi kuch likhti hoon ... kuch bhi ...aur hamesha sey yey aadat hey (from academic to social to professional stuff) ... ki usko aik baar tu zaroor hi padhti hoo'n n aik sey zeyada baar bhi ...
yehi baat hoti hey jab main kisi aur ki poetry padh rahi hoti hoo'n ya logo'n sey kehti hoon ki tell me wherever I lack in my stuff ... cz likhney waley aik zehn sey likhta hey .... and 2 minds r always better :) just like second thoughts which always be better than first.
Aa'n haa'n ... aur kon sa wala GENUINE nahi tha ...wo bhi tu bataein :( ... per mujhey iss pey bhi shak hey ... see yey jo 2 log aap ney aagey peechay lagaein hein na yey saaf bata rahein hein ki ... "alag hey fasana jo her suu hey jaari" .... lolz
__________________ ........................................ little changes bring the BIG ones ... so let's get changed right from the individual level to change the whole picture I Love Pakistan Verbal Impression lasts longer n matters more than Visual Impression so be thoughtful about it ...........AQUARIAN...........
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18-06-2008, 10:26 AM
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Rep Power: 14 | | arey nahin nahin, merey tamaam thanx genuine hi hotey hain, yahan per chunkey main ne bohat ziada khushi aur excitement main thanx kaha tha is liyeh zara us ki intensity ko berhaney ke liyeh GENUINE wala keh diya .....
toba toba, khawateen kis kader SHAKKI hoti hain ......
J/K.:)
Acha meri adat tumharey bilkul opposite hai . main aik baar likh ker kabhi dobara nahin perhta. Exams and social, totally:). Issi liyeh merey marks bhi hamaisha kum aatey hain aur teachers aur parents ne meri bari thukai lagai thi ke tum revise ker liya kero .
but main jaisey hi finish kerta hoon, mujh per handover kerkey bahir jaa ke khailney ki jaldi hoti hai . that is why i never revise:)...aur yehi haal likhney main bhi hai. bus jo likh liya jaisey likh liya, kalam rakhney ke baad kabhi dobara ussey check nahin kiya....perh leta hoon mager aik naqid ki nazer se nahin dekhta:)....bus meri kamzori hai ye
ub mera imaan is baat per aur bhi pakka ho gaya hai ke ALLAH TALLAH jo bhi kertey hain wo hamarey bhaley ke liye hi hota hai:). itney taweel arsey ke baad yahan aa ker itni achi behan se milna bhi merey haq main behter tha issi liyeh to mulakaat hui:). aur ub meri ye kamzori meri behan duur ker diya karegi:). theek?:) | | | | |
18-06-2008, 05:49 PM
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Originally Posted by Emblem99 Hey fellows, I am sharing another one of my poems
"Bicher ker hum se kabhi wo bhi terpa to hoga
Chund lamhey hi sahi, wo bhi roya to hoga
Beenai chashm ki kho gai hai ter reh ker
Us ke nainon ko bhi ashkon ne bhigoya to hoga
Dil ke rishtey bhi kis kader ajeeb hotey hain
Tujh ko bhi sanam kisi rishtey ne thukraya to hoga
Lub khamosh honge, kismat main tanhai hogi
Tub hi wo merey piyaar main dooba to hoga
Terey naseeb main hai aakhiri saans jub tuk
Jahan bhi jaoge wahan piyaar ka saya to hoga"
Allah hafiz |
NADEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEMMMMM BHAIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII...... ........................
main ne aj dekhi hai ye poetry............. 
bht zbrdsssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssst hai............. 
uf oor kia kahun...................
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